Posted by: Author | October 28, 2013

Tuesday Tales- October 29, 2013- Sweet

This week’s word is SWEET. This is a continuation of the Thanksgiving short story.
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“I had no idea you’d gone to medical school. As much as I loved your grandparents I didn’t really see them once I came back from college myself.”

“No problem. Gramps died a few years ago. You can’t be expected to have paid much attention to a former teen boyfriend’s grandparents, could you?” Chip smiled. His white teeth that had always been one of his best features shone in the dim light of the room. “Will you come tomorrow and be tested? I know it’s a holiday but I’ve made arrangements to have the tests done as we need to move quickly for Matt.”

A bit sad that he thought she didn’t have a lasting tie to his grandparents and more than a little ashamed that she hadn’t tried to keep in contact with them, Molly said, “I can be tested but what are the realistic chances of finding a donor?”

“We won’t know until we try.” Chip stood and brushed the front of his pants. “You’re tearing that ribbon to shreds.” He nodded at her hands.

“Oh, I guess I am. I was going to make a wreath but ran out of time since I’ve been gone. I guess I can save it for next year.” She looked down and sure enough, she’d made a mess of the end of the roll. She stood to follow him to the door.

Chip turned the knob and pulled the door open, then shouldered the screen. He walked onto the porch and turned to her where she stood half in and half out of the house. Cupping her face in the palm of his hand, he whispered, “You’re still the same sweet Molly I remember even though I’ve heard how tough you are now.”

Confused by what he meant and more than a little addled by the warmth of his touch, Molly couldn’t find her tongue to respond and before she knew it, he had leapt off her porch and was gone into the darkness of the night.


Responses

  1. Iris B's avatar

    I’m gonna love this story …. I know it! 🙂

  2. Jea's avatar

    Love how you use the ribbon to show her anxiety. This is a lovely scene. I’m hoping they will get back together. I’ll be here every week, waiting for this to happen.Great story. I’m totally sucked in.

    • Author's avatar

      Thanks Jean. I’m glad you are hooked. I like these two characters a lot.

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  3. Lindsay Downs's avatar

    What great emotion in this scene and yes I agree with Jean about the use of the ribbon for anxiety. I can’t wait to see what happens next

    • Author's avatar

      Thanks Lindsay. I’m glad the ribbon was effective and the emotion came through.

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  4. Vicki Locey's avatar

    Great post! I can`t wait to see what happens next.

  5. Sarah Cass's avatar

    Love how she tore the ribbon without being aware of it. My goodness I can’t wait to see what these two get up to…I love their chemistry already.

    • Author's avatar

      Thanks Sarah. They are a fun couple to write.

  6. davee jones's avatar

    I’m curious to see if she will be a donor match…and also what is going to happen. I thought he might kiss her on the porch, but, he darted away too soon. great short

    • Author's avatar

      Thanks Davee. Glad your curiosity is whetted.

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  7. Sherry Gloag's avatar

    ‘Sweet’ seems to be bringing out the emotion in everyone’s Tale this week. Great use of the ribbon to show her disquiet.

    • Author's avatar

      Thanks Sherry and I think you’re right- sweet definitely hit the emotional cord this week.

  8. trishafaye's avatar

    Nice use of the prompt. Good addition to your Thanksgiving story. I like how its turning out. Great job!

    • Author's avatar

      thanks Tricia. I’m happy with it as well. Glad you like.

  9. Morgan K Wyatt's avatar

    This story is like candy. One little piece has left me with the desire to devour the whole story. Give me more!

    • Author's avatar

      That’s so sweet, Morgan. Haha. I said sweet and you said candy. Little things amuse me. Glad you’re liking it. I’m about ready to submit it!

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  10. Stefan Ellery's avatar

    I liked how he ran away at the end


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