For Tuesday Tales this week, we’re writing to the word prepare. I’m working on my NaNoWrimo story set in 1788 but thought I’d share one more posting from my thriller story since I won’t get back to it until the madness of the November writing craze is over.
Be sure to check out the other tales here. We’re got some great stories going on.
I followed Dawn down the side of the building with my weapon drawn. A few moments before we made it to the large door we could see ahead, shots rang out.
She and I both hunkered down lower as if making ourselves smaller would make us bullet proof. Moving faster now as we were sure our comrades were under fire, we arrived at the door.
Dawn nodded to me. I interpreted her signal as she would lead as I opened the door and covered her.
Moving as a single unit, we entered the building and cleared the area. There was still gunfire—way too much fire—but we pressed on.
Coming around a corner, Dawn stopped so abruptly, I almost crashed into her.
Peering over her shoulder, I was completely unprepared for the sight in front of me.
There were a number of nasty, smelly, mattresses strewn around the room in some semblance of order. Each of them held a woman or girl. Some were either passed out, some attempting to sit up as if to try to figure out what was happening and a few may have even been dead. It was hard to tell but the odor in the dingy room had the distinct flavor of a dead body or two.
Before my eyes truly adjusted to the darkness, Dawn said, “To the left. Two men.”
They came at us with guns blasting.
Dawn took one out and I got the other.
As they fell to the ground, I said, “Keep your eyes open. There are probably more.”
“Ya think?” She practically snarled the words but I didn’t take offense. This was serious and deadly, there was no time to be a sissy with hurt feelings. It was take down time.
Jillian Chantal 
Great stuff. Love the way you used the prompt. Like the “snarled” Great show word.
By: mhsusannematthews on November 7, 2017
at 10:01 am
thank you very much! Glad you liked it. I love he word snarled. 🙂
By: Author on November 7, 2017
at 10:47 am
Oh my gosh! Totally riveted! But I do love her snarkiness in the middle of something so intense.
By: Tricia on November 7, 2017
at 11:28 am
thanks. I appreciate it. Having many law enforcement friends, I know how they can be and I’m actually basing two of the characters on people I know- AND they know and are thrilled with it. The main character actually has the name of one friend. He’s been waiting patiently for HIS story. LOL
By: Author on November 7, 2017
at 11:42 am
Wow, that was awesome!
By: Vicki Locey on November 7, 2017
at 3:43 pm
awww thanks. That means a lot.
By: Author on November 7, 2017
at 6:37 pm
Love it I will have to remember to keep coming back to this one
By: Cathy Brockman on November 7, 2017
at 7:54 pm
thanks Cathy, I appreciate the compliment. Glad you liked it.
By: Author on November 7, 2017
at 9:32 pm
Great description of what the girls have to endure. Love the ending paragraph!
By: Flossie Benton Rogers on November 7, 2017
at 10:09 pm
Wow! You gave me goosebumps. Now I need to know what’s going on here. Well done!
By: jeanjoachim on November 8, 2017
at 6:49 am
🙂 Thanks Jean!
By: Author on November 8, 2017
at 3:41 pm
Great scene! You had me on the edge of my seat. Love the ‘practically snarled’ – a great word choice for that moment.
By: trishafaye on November 10, 2017
at 4:52 pm